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Let's throw away the princes,
the knights in shining armor.
No servant boys and princesses.
No magic, no villains.

Because our story isn't like
a fairytale. There were no
battles. There were no wars.

We both know that neither of
us has read Romeo and Juliet,
and I doubt we resemble Elizabeth
and Darcy.

There were no family feuds,
and no love triangles to
throw us off balance.

Because we're anything but a classic.
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I had a different version of this written out, and I was about to post it when I must have accidentally clicked "Cancel". All that work was deleted. :faint:

So, I tried to remember every line I had written down, and I think I got 90% of it right in this revised version. Sadly, I couldn't remember that last 10%.

Hopefully this is acceptable, and not too terrible. Have a good early Valentines Day!

:bulletblue: Did it flow? Or did you find it hard to swallow?

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I found this poem very interesting because it had a very medieval feel to it.
I feel as if you have taken language from Romeo and Juliet in the 4th verse which I really like.
It flowed perfectly and I enjoyed the sharpness and the rhythm of each line. The verses are well balanced and I felt the poem was the perfect length. I think the last line really hits the spot, it's very powerful.
I think it sums up how I interrupt this poem. Overall I really like this poem and I am very impressed. Keep up the good work :D
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AisuruTheWolf1 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2014
Well of course.  If you were a classic, then you wouldn't be unique, now would you?  ;P

And typically I write everything out in MS Word/Notepad, since I've had similar situations/my internet crash on me, and I lose everything... and then I just copy/paste from there.
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed!

Same here. I also save them in my Sta.sh sometimes. :nod:
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AisuruTheWolf1 Featured By Owner 5 days ago
I haven't used Sta.sh yet.  Then again, I haven't really been around... so it's not like I've really had a chance to yet.  ;P

Is it reliable?
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner 4 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I would say yes, though it may depend on the speed of your computer. :nod:
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AisuruTheWolf1 Featured By Owner 3 days ago
Hmm, I doubt speed would be an issue - but the internet connection, I'm not so sure.  I do live on campus, after all. =P
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner 3 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
It works pretty well for me - even when my computer isn't having the best day. ^^; You should give it a try. ^^
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AisuruTheWolf1 Featured By Owner 2 days ago
Hmm, then perhaps I shall.  :)  Thanks for letting me know.
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
Not a problem! :nod:
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Little-Tin-Wings Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2014
I quite enjoyed this lovely little poem, I think it flowed quite nicely with an even beat.  For me, the message comes across as something like this:  "We don't live a fairytale, princes and knights in shining armor don't exist; they're not going to come and sweep you off your feet.  It's time to wake up from your fantasies and live in reality."  Another way I interpreted the message, was something like this: "Our lives aren't perfect magical tales filled with romance and grand events, but that's okay, because we're anything but a classic."

It does have a "very medieval feel to it," as another commenter stated, which to me, also gives it a mystical aura and a feeling of awe.

My thoughts all in all, is that this is an amazing piece that gives me many good emotions as well as a very strong feeling that I can't quite comprehend.  Beautiful job. :clap:
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Why, thank you! :aww: It means a whole lot to me that you take the time to write such kind comments! :glomp:
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